My assignment was to create a poem like Ted Hughes poem - Tractor.

Im 13 btw, so were not looking for the BEST if you get what i mean, but if its average for my age.

Here it is, also if i need to include more Similes,metaphors,alliteration etc. Please tell me :)

Ok heres my poem.

Title: Clock

The Clock stands like a general
Watching me through its hard frozen face.
I return its look in hatred!
Its cold, darkened, woven wood looked as if nails had torn through its hollow body.

The texture twisting and turning as if hell itself were a whirl pool.
Its wooden heart ticked,like a bomb as if it were dying through every minute
While its firm numb hands stretched to the twelfth hour.

I saw its rotten, cold wrinkled skin follows up to its cover of glass,where its hard antique face is disgustingly preserved. It stands there still,watching me with its stiff concentrated eyes, I stare back with frustration, The demon is silent , but its eyes are awake watching and waiting for death to silence its ticking, as it strucks twelve...

Its waits in a corner, of a dull lifeless room, Light explores with nothing to find but shadows linked to everything it see's. Dust travels in particles that only the untrained human eye can find.

The chimes begin, Echoing throughout the house,DONG!
I freeze as it shakes my body through its violent scream! DONG!
it repeats itself, like a record player scratched, as it played its final 10 more chimes. Nothing moved, nothing was heard, only the chime mellowing away back to nothing but a seed of silence...

So there you are, i dont mind any abuse towards my poem as long as you say whats wrong. Thanks :)